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He's BAAAAaaaaack! Tor, that is.

K Pelle

Thank's a lot for another great chapter.

K

Thanks for the update. Good story so far, I like the gradual way in which you are introducing new characters and thereby complicating/altering the plot line. Keep up the good work.

thanks m8

ham

Thanks for another chapter! Still needing regular fixes to keep going.

Thanks for the new Chapter!

Can't wait to see whats in the basement or is that the donjone!

Thanks for the chapter, and nice play to have an ending, makes me want to read more.

Thanks

For several seconds no one moved or spoke, instead they all gaped at the open hole in the beautifully finished and highly polished wooden floor.

You can not stop there.
The next update will be forever down the road.

I waited all April and now it's May, Please, another chapter! You left it with a huge cliff hanger!!

Sorry, but it's Hockey playoff season. I've been watching the NHL playoffs, the WHL playoffs and the IIHF playoffs.

(Hey, I'm Canadian, and for me, hockey is THE sport of sports!)

enjoy your hockey m8,
life is short enough!!
cheers

ham

I just re-read the Alpha story and started reading this. It's really quite good!

There is one hilarious typo in Chapter 11 though... when the sapper group comes in to take care of the explosives, he refers to them as a 'discovered IUD'. An IUD is a contraceptive (Intra-Uterine) Device; I believe you were looking for IED, which is Improvised Explosive Device.

Although, given fundamentalist Islam's general level of respect for women and opinions of birth control, a plot involving explosive IUDs wouldn't really surprise me.

alkiera wrote:There is one hilarious typo in Chapter 11 though... when the sapper group comes in to take care of the explosives, he refers to them as a 'discovered IUD'. An IUD is a contraceptive (Intra-Uterine) Device; I believe you were looking for IED, which is Improvised Explosive Device.

Okay, I admit that the typo is my fault to start with, but am I ever going to tease my editor about that one. In fact I doubt if I'll ever let her live it down - she was a teacher and as well as English, she taught classes on 'safe sex' to hundreds of kids over the last few decades.

That's kind of like in a story I did some editing for. The main character was a spy, and one chapter the writer sent me had the guy dropping into a "connivance" store before going on a mission. Such an appropriate and funny spelling error! I could see the dialogue: Yes, I'd like the deal on dirty deeds, the prime cut of triple cross, and gimme' a handful of white lies to go!